Aeroplane Analogy

I know an airline company, they are going to give free air tickets one day... You have to get a pass from them... And on the day that they are going to give the tickets, just produce the pass... How do you get the pass? Just believe that they are going to give away the air tickets and you will get the pass... It will entitle you to a free air ticket to any place you wanna go... Everyone who has the pass gets a free ticket? When are they giving it out? Once everyone has heard of this good news...

Ok, I'm going to tell this to all the people i know... after all the pass is unlimited, as long as they believe they will have the pass and they will get the free ticket. This is so exciting!

"Hey I've got something cool to tell you..." "No no... I am too busy too listen." Ok nevermind, he is too busy this time...
"Hey! There is this company giving away free air tickets........" "Yah right, go back to dreamland! There is no such thing" He din believe me...
20... 30... All of them din believe me...
"I've got something to tell you... It may seem unbelievable... But this company...." "REally?? HoW do i Get the pass?" "You believe? You've got it.... Go tell more people. The day is near :)"

"Attention to all! The day has come for Calvary Airways to give away our free air tickets! Those who have the pass, please come forward and collect your free air tickets! Thanks for trusting Calvary Airways! Enjoy Your trip:)"

"What! I dun have the pass!" "Huh? You mean there was really such a thing?" "I wanted to believe, but I had my doubts..." "You mean that was what you wanted to tell me? Oh my! Was i really that busy?"

It is my duty to tell you this good news... Whether you believe it or not is your choice... Yes it is just soo easy, believe and you get the pass to a place where you spent eternity with God! Is it so hard for people to do... In this analogy, what is at stake is just an air ticket... However in reality, it is our soul...

I will tell the world... Again and again... 1st time they dun believe me, i will try again... I've got the pass... And i know so much...

Hey... What do you all think about this analogy? Anyway to improve it? Or is it not good at all?